Saturday, September 21, 2013

Jungha Lee/my terrible experience with yacht/TUE 1pm 5-6

 Jungha Lee

 

 - Yacht, my cruel opponent -

"Help me! Help me!" I waited until someone found me. Oh, have I ever yelled so desperately like this?

 My father has enjoyed a lot of outdoor sports as his hobbies, especially riding a bike and sailing a yacht. When it comes to yacht, many people might think yacht is a huge and luxurious white boat that wealthy people enjoy in movies. But there is small yacht called Dinghy for 1~3 people.

 One day in summer vacation, maybe 2 years ago, my father suggested me to go yachting, saying "How about going to yacht this Friday? It will be funny and you need develop challenging mind". I refused at first but finally, unwillingly accepted his suggestion. So on Friday, my family arrived boundless huge Lake in Kyung-Ki province. There was a qualified yachting school, they offer yacht course for beginners and lend yacht equipment for advanced people. Before going into the lake, students had to take lessons indoors. Making a knot and preparing sailing were complicated to understand, I managed to learn basic principles to adjust yacht and acquainted safety regulations.

 After that, I went to lake for actual experience. I couldn't follow my father only, because there were a lot of people who wanted to learn yachting. The shore was very crowded. I had to set sailing process all by myself. When preparation is finished, I started to sail. At first, it was not windy, so I moved forward slowly with manipulating perfectly. But how much time  is passed? Suddenly strong wind started to blow. I was embarrassed that yacht was completely out of control. I couldn't handle anything. At that moment, my yacht lose balance and overturned. I fell into the middle of the lake. Even though I was wearing a life jacket, I was too scared. The way to set back the yacht or safety regulations utterly disappeared in my head. To make matters worse, my foot was twisted with a rope hung on the yacht in the water. It caught my foot like a snake. I started to yell. "Help me! Help me!" Before long, some people in a boat came to me and rescued me. It was really terrible.

 Unfortunately, beginner's course consisted of two-days program. It meant that the second day was waiting for me. Well, I did it. After I finished the course, I got a certificate of achievement. But I was absolutely not happy. In the car, coming back home, I declared that I will never do yacht again. Father looked disappointed but nodded his head meekly. Challenging something might be good for one's mind and body both. But I learned that sometimes terrible challenging experience can rather prohibit someone from that.

 

3 comments:

  1. To: Jungha Lee
    From: Wonpil Lee
    Assignment: My terrible experience with yacht

    1. What I like about this piece of writing is the vivid description. You succeeded in showing readers a concrete image, so I felt as if I had been in the river.

    2. Your main point seems that terrible experience can be harmful sometimes.

    3. I like the introduction part of your work because these sentences attracted my attention powerfully. These make readers focus on your writing.

    4. Some paragraphs could be improved if you divided them more effectively. For example, I recommend you dividing the second paragraph into two separate paragraphs; One for the father’s suggestion and one for the beginner’s training.

    5. The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is to use more quotation. I think you can use more quotation in the last paragraph. It would be more effective to express your main idea you received from it. For instance, you can change some normal sentences into some quotations between you and your father.

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  2. To: Jungha Lee
    From: Wonpil Lee
    Assignment: My terrible experience with yacht

    1. What I like about this piece of writing is the vivid description. You succeeded in showing readers a concrete image, so I felt as if I had been in the river.

    2. Your main point seems that terrible experience can be harmful sometimes.

    3. I like the introduction part of your work because these sentences attracted my attention powerfully. These make readers focus on your writing.

    4. Some paragraphs could be improved if you divided them more effectively. For example, I recommend you dividing the second paragraph into two separate paragraphs; One for the father’s suggestion and one for the beginner’s training.

    5. The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is to use more quotation. I think you can use more quotation in the last paragraph. It would be more effective to express your main idea you received from it. For instance, you can change some normal sentences into some quotations between you and your father.

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  3. - Enemy on the Lake-

    "Help me! Help me!" I waited until someone found me. Oh, have I ever yelled so desperately like this?

    My father enjoys a lot of outdoor sports as his hobbies, but the one that my father has fallen in love with until now is sailing. When it comes to sailboat, many people might think that is a huge and luxurious white boat that wealthy people enjoy in movies. But there is smaller sailboat called Dinghy for only 1 to 3 people.

    One day in summer vacation, maybe 2 years ago, my father suggested me to go sailing, saying "How about sailing this Friday? It will be interesting and you need to develop challenging spirit". I refused that at first, but finally, unwillingly accepted his suggestion. So on Friday, my family arrived boundless huge lake in Gyeonggido. There is a qualified sailing school that offers sailing courses for beginners and lends sailboat equipment for advanced sailor. Before going into the lake, students had to take lessons indoors. Making a knot and procedure to assemble various sailing equipment were complicated to understand, I managed to learn basic principles to adjust boat and acquainted safety regulations.

    After that, I went to lake for actual experience. I couldn't follow my father only, because the shore was very crowded with a lot of people who want to learn sailing. I had to set sailing process all by myself. When everything was prepared, I started to sail. At first, it was not windy, so I moved forward slowly with manipulating perfectly. But how much time is passed? Suddenly strong wind started to blow. I was embarrassed that my sailboat was completely out of control. I couldn't handle anything. At that moment, my sailboat lose balance and overturned. I fell into the middle of the lake. Even though I was wearing a life jacket, I was too scared. The way to set back the sailboat or safety regulations utterly disappeared in my head. To make matters worse, my foot was twisted with a rope hung on the boat in the water. It caught my foot like a snake. I started to yell. "Help me! Help me!" Before long, some people in a boat came to me and rescued me. It was really terrible.

    Unfortunately, beginner's course consisted of two-days programs. It meant that the second day was waiting for me. Well, I did it. After finishing the course, I got a certificate of achievement. But I was absolutely not happy. In the car, coming back home, I declared that I will never sail again. Father looked disappointed but nodded his head meekly. Challenging something might be good for one's mind and body both. But I learned that sometimes terrible challenging experience can rather prohibit someone from that.

    ReplyDelete