1. Grinning slightly, he said…
è Grinning as he propped up his chin with one hand, he said…
2. DaeSung kept narrating his memories.
è DaeSung spoke of his memories in a low, and slightly nostalgic voice.
3. I took an entrance test, and barely passed.
è I took an exhausting 2 hour entrance test, and was barely able to make the cut.
4. He never really cared for the test too much.
è He never gave much thought or gave the test any meaning to it. (Same?)
è It would have been hard for my friend to be less interested in the test, as he had never really given it much thought in the first place. (Same?)
è HELP (Maybe just keep it the way it was?)
5. ….he started to become afraid.
è He developed chronic paranoia. (ok lol, no.)
è He became scared that one day, he would fall from his shaky perch in the ladder of grades. (hm)