tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9194298662561862122.post4784959815362419429..comments2023-05-03T03:20:29.092-07:00Comments on Intermediate Writing (2) Fall 2013 5-6: yeonsoo seo/ place/ tues 1pmprofjbhhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06809066317885065503noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9194298662561862122.post-81535162012299365752013-12-15T04:58:27.889-08:002013-12-15T04:58:27.889-08:00Young-LeeYoung-LeeAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9194298662561862122.post-73832168967650452372013-12-15T04:50:41.504-08:002013-12-15T04:50:41.504-08:001. What did you like best about this essay? Be as ...1. What did you like best about this essay? Be as specific as possible.<br />I liked how vivid the descriptions were.<br />2. Did the writer describe the place clearly? List any parts that were not clear to you.<br />No, everything was clear.<br />3. Did the writer appeal to the different sense? List two sensory details that you especially liked.<br />I liked how she wrote about the squeaking sneakers, and the 'firm, but springy' running tracks.<br />4. How would you describe the mood or the atmosphere of this place?<br />Energetic, busy<br />5. Why do you think the writer chose to write about this place?<br />This was a place to relieve stress, which left an impression in her mind.<br />6. How could the writer improve this essay when he or she revises? Make only one suggestion.<br />Perhaps more descriptions may be nice.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9194298662561862122.post-75265290620535763122013-10-27T04:00:05.019-07:002013-10-27T04:00:05.019-07:001. What did you like best about this essay? Be as ...1. What did you like best about this essay? Be as specific as possible.<br /><br />The writer used many expressions which appeal to different senses like smell, sound, sight. This made the writing very vivid and I liked that.<br /><br /> <br />2. Did the writer describe the place clearly? List any parts that were not clear to you.<br /><br />It was clear to me.<br /><br /> <br />3. Did the writer appeal to the different sense? List two sensory details that you especially liked.<br /><br />I could hear ping pong ball bouncing and rolling on the table - This appeals to my hearing sense. I could imagine the sound clearly.<br /><br />Sounds of basketball player's sneakers squeaking against the gym floor and shouting of spectators still echoes in my ears. - This one two. The sound which this sentence is indicating clearly comes to my ear.<br /><br />4. How would you describe the mood or the atmosphere of this place?<br /><br />brisk, energetic, bright<br /><br /> <br />5. Why do you think the writer chose to write about this place?<br /><br />I think it's because the place which the writer is describing was a big help of relieving stress.<br /><br /> <br />6. How could the writer improve this essay when he or she revises? Make only one suggestion.<br /><br />Though this essay greatly appeals to senses, it would be better if some similes are also added to the writing.<br /><br />Lee Seung-HwanAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9194298662561862122.post-13615420622317652272013-10-23T04:45:12.067-07:002013-10-23T04:45:12.067-07:00To: Yeonsu Seo
From: Wonpil Lee
Commented in accor...To: Yeonsu Seo<br />From: Wonpil Lee<br />Commented in accordance with Peer Response Form at p. 120, 121<br /><br />1. What did you like best about this essay?<br />- I like your description especially of sound.<br />2. Did the writer describe the place clearly? List any parts that were not clear to you.<br />- Yes. Brilliant!<br />3. Did the writer appeal to the different senses? List two sensory details that you especially liked.<br />- Sounds of basketball player's sneakers squeaking against the gym floor and shouting of spectators still echoes in my ears.<br />I can still remember the smell of the fresh rubber flooring in the weight rooms and on the running track, and how it was firm but so pleasantly springy under my feet.<br />4. How would you describe the mood or the atmosphere of this place?<br />- Lively, animated, and nostalgic.<br />5. Why do you think the writer chose to write about this place?<br />- You have many good memories there.<br />6. How could the writer improve this essay when he or she revises? Make only one suggestion.<br />- Do you have any meaningful experience there? If you say that, it will be better to understand the solid connection between you and this place.<br />Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com