tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9194298662561862122.post1125302105660107535..comments2023-05-03T03:20:29.092-07:00Comments on Intermediate Writing (2) Fall 2013 5-6: So Young Park/ Task 4/ Writing Classprofjbhhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06809066317885065503noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9194298662561862122.post-82689745211365421952013-10-19T08:35:54.775-07:002013-10-19T08:35:54.775-07:00Hi, Soyoung^.^
I really like your introduction des...Hi, Soyoung^.^<br />I really like your introduction describing the ocean. As reading that part, I could clearly drew the ocean in my mind by expressions such as saltness, stick and crashing of waves. But, I could not understand what 'two little boys are playing wrestle' were explaining. Among your expressions appealing to senses, I especially like 'saltness' and 'crashing'. I could feel the calm and peacefulness from your special place. I think your choose this place because in that place, you could think quietly getting out from busy, nosiy city. I guess you felt comfortable and enjoyed the time you were there. But If you add more sensory details to other parts except the introduction it will be more interesting to read and give me the more vividness. Great job!>,<<br />by Ju Ye-lamAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9194298662561862122.post-34583200941747490672013-10-17T07:45:09.299-07:002013-10-17T07:45:09.299-07:00-I thing you choose to write about this place beca...-I thing you choose to write about this place because you love the feeling of your toes in the warm sand. And it brings a calming effect on you which makes you be relaxed and not worry about anything.<br />From Jina ParkAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com